It was a hot summer day and we like to get out. So we went to a friends for a bar-b-que. It wasnice out, I love to bar-b-que. It wasn't my idea, but I went along for the ride. They like my cooking and I love to cook, so what the hell, I didn't mind. I fired up the grill and cooked up a meal. I'm a nutritionist, yeah, I know how to cook. They liked my cooking, it's usually healthy. We ate and I found myself in the kitchen, hands in the sink. You guessed it dishes! I got a little irritated that I cook and then get stuck with the dishes too!
We went for a walk, our friend has a few acres, there's a lot to see. The trees were blossoming, flowers full bloom. The wife said, "let's help her!" Our friend had trouble moving about. She hoped on the rider and began to mow. She handed me the weed wacker and sent me away. Not what I expected, did it anyway. What the hell, cook, dishes, and weed wacking too!
The lawn looked good, my hair a mess! I got caught up under those trees!
We looked around, talked a bit, and joked around. Someone mentioned a fire pit. I dug one at home and our friend loved it! My wife grabbed a shovel, dug once, then twice. It somehow ended up in my hand, while the other two sat! Turns out, I dug another great fire pit!
I don't mind helping out a friend in need but there is a limit. What was supposed to be a fun day hanging out with a friend turned out to be a bunch of 'to-do's' crossed off her friggin list! I could have stayed home and worked on my own!
It was one hell of a day! It was nice to go home. I didn't do much when I got there. It was time for some much needed R & R!
Next time I'm invited to a bar-b-que, I'll do JUST THAT!
This is a vignette, a snapshot, a quick look with a snappy close--but a vignette is not a narrative; it is an anti-narrative.
ReplyDeleteNarrative insists that something be at stake; there has to be an issue, a problem, suspense, resolution. In a vignette, one is properly left eager to know what-next and hanging, as here. In a narrative, one is left satisfied, all strings tied up neatly.
Try a rewrite, write a narrative.
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