Wednesday, April 18, 2012

Week 12: Prompt 58. I met the most amazing person.

January 2010 is when we met.  Took a drive down to the water front.  It was cold, it was dark, it was winter in Maine.  I pulled in not knowing what to expect.  I walk over to her truck and climbed inside.  We sat there for hours just talking.  We talked about how I had children and how I was done with their father.  Talked about school and the journey I was taking.  She talked about her mom, and how she was ill, dying of cancer.  She mentioned that she wasn't looking, the last was on and off for five years and she was 'all set'.  I wasn't looking either, I was still in a mess.  We agreed, neither were looking.  Six months later, we got married on Hampton Beach in New Hampshire.
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  1. johngoldfineApril 18, 2012 at 8:51 AM

    There you go--a startling juxtaposition.

    I'd use punctuation to help point it out by setting out the last sentence as a single paragraph.

    I'd also rework the sentence to save the punch for last or to position it better, to make it that much punchier. Here's my version of your last sentence:

    "Six months later, on Hampton Beach in New Hampshire, we were married."

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