Alone in a quiet room...What do you hear?
Typically silence, but not today.
The auger turning...
The blower blowing...
A car just drove by...
Typically quiet, not today.
With skyrocketing fuel oil...
and jack frost nipping...
I hear the pellet stove heating..
...alone...
not so quiet...
Alone in a quiet room...What do you see?
Alone...I am...
I see windows, caressed by winter
I see flames, warming and scenting this room
I see plants as they clean my air
I see photos...on the window sill...of my children
papers, books, computer, cell phone...
Inside...I see calm and stillness
relaxation...
alone...
and quiet...
Alone in a quiet room...But what's really happening?
What's really happening?
With the chill outside, pellet stove is running
My body is still...though my fingers are moving
My puppy is sleeping...
I am working...and relaxing
Now thinking...maybe over-thinking...
did I write enough? I read some others...
Were they more interesting?
Yup, definitely over-thinking...
back to relaxing...it's been a long day...
But what's really happening?
More than meets the eye...
My heart is beating, blood is pumping
lungs inhaling, then exhaling
my body is aging, wrinkles are forming...
now fingers are slowing...
homework is ending...
still alone...
still relaxing...
I really like almost all of this: the close observation, the creation of a mood, the confidence in the importance of the details, the ability to get behind the surface of the assignment and to find the real and somewhat hidden intention of the prompt-writer. You get it perfectly.
ReplyDeleteWhat about that 'almost'? Poetry or prose in poetry-like lines, not usually for 162. I decided to pretend that you were writing paragraphs, not verses or lines.
hmmm....the 'poetry-like' lines...were just a figment of your imagination...those were "creative" paragraphs...afterall, this is a creative writing class right? Thanks :)
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